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Which text is more successful in showing what it is like to move to a different country? You may choose wither Text One or Text Two but you must explain your choice carefully. Give two reasons why you chose this text and one reason for not choosing the other text. By Wishka Syed

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I believe that text two is more successful in showing us what it is like to move to a different country. Text two’s style of writing is descriptive which lets the reader feel, hear, smell, see and touch all the character’s feelings and emotions as he moves to a different country; “white house with its perfectly mown lawns and flowers lining the entrance and a carpet in every room”, “a landscape so white, so pure, could only dazzle us, blind us, intoxicate us.” By reading such description, the reader for example, feels as if he himself is standing with the landscape right in front of him. The author uses description to create an image in the reader’s mind and to give him a closer look of the story.

 

I also chose text two because of the amount of figurative language used in it; “like a mother duck, she walked ahead of us”, “garment over another, layer by layer, like the homeless”, “The town of Granby sheltered us.” FOS makes sure that the description does not bore the reader and from time to time adds sparkle to the text. The author uses them to captivate the reader and give them something to relate to.

 

The reason I did not choose text one was because of the abundant usage of short sentences like, “The taxi pulled up outside the hotel.”, “Alen watched television.” These short sentences although might add emphasis, but over usage of them makes it look like the author is an eight year old! Short sentences lack proper description which, I believe, cannot give the reader a full show of what it is like to move to a different country.