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Q) Write a story, true or imaginary, titled “The Final Breath” by Xainab Shujah 10M

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The bell tolled like a siren, sending out sound waves in every direction. It rang alarmingly into the ears of anyone within twenty feet. I looked at the people scattered before me. Their eyes looked like those of a trapped vixen in the clutches of a hungry wolf. I could almost smell the fear that hung in the air, mixed in with so much suspense it was difficult to breathe. My eyes darted from one person to another, hoping for an explanation, a reassurance that everything was okay. But it was no use. Everyone around me was doing the same.

“Max, what’s going on?” I asked my older brother, who looked just as confused as I was.

“How the hell am I supposed to know, Helga? We’re Polish Jews in a Nazi concentration camp, for God’s sake!” he retorted defensively.

I cast another look at my surroundings. High iron walls, barbed wire at the top. The guards that stood against the walls, every ten or so feet apart. Wait. Something wasn’t right. What…? The bell, the confusion, the guards…

The guards.

I focused on a guard that was standing a mere five feet away from me. He had tousled blond hair, sky blue eyes, and a well-shaped face. His name was Hans. He would almost have been handsome if not for his permanent scowl.

But today, the scowl was not there.

Instead, it had been replaced with a smile. A smile so cruel and horrifying it pierced my heart. It was a smile that knew, knew, knew….

It was a smile that relished pain and torture and suffering.

It was a smile that sealed my fate.

Then, as if I knew it would happen, the guards, all of them with terrible smiles on their faces, were moving in. each guard walking at the same pace, in the exact same direction. Towards the centre. Towards us. The Jews. The filthy Jews.

I heard screams in the sleeping area as mothers and children were thrown out of their only sanctuary, their tears grazing the ground as they were thrown towards the floor. The guards started yelling in heavy German, not filtering any abuse or disgust they could throw at us.

“Stay close to me”, Max said in my ear, and gripped my hand as if to never let go. The guards were right behind us now, and they started pushing and swearing. They didn’t care who they hurt. I pictured monsters in Nazi uniforms; their strong hands grasping for flesh, for clothing or for hair- anything they could toss, hit or maim. Out of the corner of my eye, I saw a lady with a swollen belly tumble to the ground, blood beginning to seep down her legs.

“My baby! My baby-” she had started to scream in agony, but one of the guards kicked her in the face.

As we were rushed into a cold stone chamber, we were told to take our clothes off.

“No!” I protested, my head swelling with a million thoughts. Take our clothes off? What the hell? Were our clothes to be washed? Were we getting a bath?

I looked at the people around me, who thought the same, and were taking their clothes off with relief at the thought of being clean again.

When Max pulled at my sleeve with worry, I screamed “No!”

Pain shooted up my back.

Behind me, stood a grinning Hans.

He tore half my shirt open with so much force, I’m sure some of my skin tore off too. He then grabbed my neck and whispered in my ear.

I could hear it despite the noise and confusion.

“You’ll smell even worse when you burn”.

Stripped naked, none of us had time to reflect or feel embarrassed as we were tossed into a crowded room. Max held me close, and I heard a prayer and felt a splatter of his tears on my cheek.

As the room filled with thick, bloated green gas, I too murmured my own prayer and gasped my final breath.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Q1) Comment on the style and language of Passage one using brief quotations. By Xainab Shuja

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This passage is an extract from an article from ‘The Guardian’, titled ‘it’s so over: Cool Cyberkids abandon Social Networking Sites’. The genre of the passage is non-fiction. The tone of the passage is informative, but neutral. The style of the passage is expository. The language used in the passage is semi-formal, passive, using short and compound sentences. The theme of the passage is “Social Media” and sub-themes include “trends” and “youngsters”. The audience of this passage is people who read newspapers or articles, generally ranging from young adults to adults. The purpose of this passage is to inform the reader on how older people are adopting social media to “kill the trend” amongst youngsters, and to slightly persuade people not to use Social Media as much.

This article uses devices such as statistics and logics to achieve certain effects on the reader. There is usage of unique vocabulary coupled with logic and evidence to make the said points more effective. The overall impression of the passage is very to-the-point, informative, but slightly persuasive as well.

The introduction to this article starts off  in a very straightforward tone, giving the reader a sense of importunity. The introduction starts off with a very relatable example of adults adopting new trends, such as, “uncles wearing skinny jeans”, “mothers investing in ra-ra skirts”, and “fathers nodding along awkwardly to the latest grime record”. Starting the introduction off with a relatable example to everyday life is extremely effectual as the reader is able to connect to the passage and wants to read more.

In the ending of the introduction, the writer has used a combination of figurative language such as “the surest way to kill a youth trend”, “adopt as its own”, and “cyber world”. The personification and jargon used makes the flow of the passage smoother, more pleasing to read. The overall introduction seems structured to grab the reader’s attention.

For the introduction, the writer introduces his ideas early on in the passage, influencing the reader’s thinking and manipulating his thoughts.

Directly after the introduction comes a paragraph that is perhaps the most distinctive out of all the views that the article presents. One of the elements that makes it so is the usage of complex vocabulary embedded in exaggerated sentences. For example “proliferation”, “trawling”, “adolescent”, “exodus”. The usage of complex vocabulary insures that the passage maintains an informative yet semi-formal approach. The vocabulary used also shows the reader that the writer is extremely capable and has a true insight to the topic he is writing about.

The second reason this passage is distinctive is because it adds a rather dramatic hint to the passage, using expressions such as “trawling”, “adolescent” and “exodus”. The usage of complex vocabulary ensures that the passage maintains an informative yet semi-formal approach. The vocabulary used also shows the reader that the writer is extremely capable and has a true insight to the topic he is writing about.

The usage of personification, “to kill a youth trend”, “adopt as its own” conveys a wider range of emotions towards the topic as well as adding emphasis to the writer’s views.

There is a constant use of jargons from beginning to end. For example, “Facebook”, “MySpace”, “CyberWorld” and “Ofcom”. The use of the jargons in this way indicates that the writer knows what he is talking about. The use of the jargons anywhere, especially here, creates a higher sense of authority and legitimacy. As a result the reader feels assured that the passage is genuine, and that the writer is well informed and able to talk about the topic.

Statistics are provided throughout the article for the reader. For example, “30% of adults have a facebook profile as compared to the 21% in 2013, and “from 55% at the start of last year to 50% this year”.

It is said that humans do not appeal to the numbers, but the statistics provided hereare explained and blended in so well with the article that the reader does not feel that way that they are out of place. The usage of statistics not only ensures the writer’s authenticity but also highlights his views.

Along with the statistical and factual elements, the writer provides us with the evidence for his columns. Stating what officials like Peter Philips and James Thickett say for example, “Data suggests they are spending less time on social networking sites”. The provided evidence proves the writer’s claim and makes what he is saying believable.

At first, it may not seem so, but punctuation is a very important part of this article. The use of commas is more prominent than the use of any other. This use of commas encourages smooth flow of writing and a complete train of thought. This helps connect the reader to the passage better, as it makes the passage seem well thought out. Whereas , if the writer had just used  full stops then he would have separated one flow of thinking in to separate individual thoughts. The writer has used hyphen, “has dropped for the first time -“, which indicate that the writer wants a particular phrase bolded out. Also, towards the end of the passage, the use of the ellipses is used to bold out the phrase.

Towards the end, the writer gives us an expert opinion from James Thickett where he explains that the usage of social media has not exactly decreased in the younger groups of users, but has increased in making of the young profiles. Providing an expert opinion like he provided statistics and evidence, has an interesting effects on the reader, psychologically people tends to believe things more if they are coming from experts or celebrities. Therefore, the expert opinion proves the passageto be even more reliable and believable.

In the passage, the writer uses logic to express his points. He uses a combination of statistical and factual elements that prove his information to be authentic. He further provides evidence for his claims by stating the names of those gave research and opinions. Furthermore , he uses a bit of figurative language as well as elements of drama and exaggerations to make the reading more interesting and easy to digest. The intro to this article is started off in a strategic way, keeping the tone straight forward and informative, but also adding undertones of humour to grab the reader’s attention.

 

 

Q).What ideas have been presented in second passage? Comment on the rhetorical desires of the passage using brief references. By Xainab Shuja

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This passage is an extract from a newspaper report, titled “Social websites harm children’s brains”. The genre of this passage is non-fiction. The theme of this passage is social media and sub themes include technology and psychology. The tone of this passage is very aggressive, but at the same time maintaining a sense of formality. The mood of the passage is slightly angry, as professionals are expressing their views on social media affecting the youth. The language used in the passage is formal, not too complex, but at the same time using bold words to support the arguments. The attitude is strongly biased and the style expository. The audience includes people who read newspaper and adults. The purpose of this report is to persuade the reader to spend less time on social media.

This news report uses strong literary devices such as evidence, facts and expert opinions to support its arguments. The overall impression that the reader gets is a sense of responsibility to agree to the writer’s views as the passage is specifically structured to manipulate the reader’s thoughts and feelings.

Anyone who reads the passage will immediately notice that it starts off heavily argumentative, and using very bold words “alarming changes”, “eminent scientist”, “disturbing reading” and    “sharp decline”, words like these are used throughout the passage. These words stand out to the reader as much as a few grains of salt in pepper pot. As a result the reader gets a sense of urgency and alarm, that this is a serious issue, one should be worrying about these words also help to create emphasis on the said phrase, an alternate for exaggeration and figurative language.

The second eminent literary device used is jargon .the writer has maintained the usage of jargons, but somehow manages to blend them in, in such a way that the reader does not find it difficult to read, for example “facebook”, “twitter”, “Bebo” and “Micro blogging”. This usage of jargons ensures the writer’s authenticities and assures the reader that what he is reading is genuine and the author was well informed.

The writer exaggerates all the way through the passage as well, “rewire the brain”, “engaged in for millennia”, “instant gratification”, etc. the way the writer has used exaggeration, he does not need to create a complex or unique argument and exaggeration is also very useful alternative for  figurative language. In this way the argument is enhanced and brought so many levels that it simply jumps out at the reader and is impossible to ignore.

Facts are also provided in the report. For example, “psychologists have also argued” and a study by the Broadcaster Audience Research shows”. The facts back up and support the writer’s views, and is one element, like statistics and expert opinion, that the reader can’t overlook or forget, it is a constant reminder that what the writer is talking about is a genuine , real- life problem that needs to be paid attention to.

Statistics are sprinkled into the mix as well, “150 million use facebook”, “6 million have signed up for twitter”. Numbers are as big as these help the reader to envision the masses the writer is talking about, and that brings up awareness. The statistics further highlight the phrases and simply scream the effort and research that took to write this report.

The also gives the reader expert opinions. Opinions are given from experts such as Baroness Greenfield and Sue Palmer. “I often wonder whether real conversation … on a supermarket shelf, and “We are seeing children’s brains … engaged in for millennia” are some examples. These opinions seem to stand in the face of any sort of opposition and seem to be doing someone to argue against them. Psychologically, the reader feels compelled to agree to something coming from as expert.

Added to facts, statistics, and expert opinion the writer provides evidence for his claims, “digital technology is changing the way we think”, etc. This further assures the reader & creates a stance for the writer.

The writer has added eye witnesses such as “a teacher of 30 years old”. This this further proves the visitor’s point and support to his argument.

The writer also implements logic and reason, which is shown by “effectively rewire the brain”. This reinforces reason and adds a rather persuasive effect.

The tone of the passage remains constant throughout. Right from the beginning, the tone starts of very argumentative and aggressive, but still staying very composed  and formal, using words such as “an eminent scientist has waived” and “may be doing more harm than good”. The tone is intertwined with the arguments in such a way that the reader unconsciously feels that he has to agree with what the writer is saying. Even if the reader has some doubts regarding the arguments presented, the argumentative tone and the serious mood would persuade him to agree to the report.

Despite the theme, mood and tone of the passage being very serious the writer scatters the variety of figurative language over the passage to make the information a little easier to digest. The figurative language used is relatable and easy to understand.They add subtle amplification on to the messages as well.

The writer used the assonance alliteration, “flight or fight” this helps the reader comprehend what a terrible effect social media has on the youth.

The writer also uses “buzzing”, which is an onomatopoeia. This helps the reader envision and actually has the sound the writer is describing.

The writer then used “killing, skinning, and butchering an animal is replaced by packets of meat on a supermarket shelf.This is a smile as well as assonance. The smile relates two things together and is relatable to the readers as well.

The uses of triples, “killing, skinning and butchering” is very effective. It is easier for the reader to comprehend, as it is in a group of three. Most symbols figures in English literature are triples, e.g: The three Witches(Macbeth), The Three Musketeers, and The Deathly Hallows (Harry potter). The way this device is incorporated is very impressive for someone analyzing a text, as it seems that the writer is very learned.

This news report uses strong literary devices such as evidence, facts and expert opinions. The tone is heavily argumentative, and the mood is very serious, as the writer is discussing the effect of Social Media on the young generation’s brain. Despite the tone and the mood, the reader does not feel gloomy but instead, because the passage is argumentative, it makes the reader feel motivated to do it right, and a sense of responsibility to prevent wrong. In order to achieve this effect, the writer uses a combination of figurative language to make the flow of the passage smoother and easier to read, and he was exaggeration to enhance most of his arguments, bolding them out to reader and leaving a lasting impression.

Q). How do the authors of both passages present the explosion of the cyber-world? Compare the language, style and content of the both passages using close reference. By Xainab Shuja

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Passage A is an extract from a newspaper article, titled, “it’s so over, cool Cyberkids abandon Social Networking Sites”. The genre of the passage is non-fiction and the audience is people who read newspaper, adults and young adults. Passage B is an extract from a newspaper report. Passage B is an extract from newspaper titled,” Social Websites Harm Children’s Brains”. The genre of the passage is non-fiction and the audience includes people who read newspaper, adults and people who want to know about the harmful effect of the social media on one’s brain. Passage A is from “The Guardian” and Passage B is extract from “Mail Online”. The overall intended effect of the passage is to persuade the reader not to use Social Media, and both the passages use the different linguistic devices such logic, evidence, statistics and the linguistic devices to convey their messages.

The tone of the Passage A is informative, and changes or alternated with the formal and semi-formal, for example” the surest way” is formal and “skinny jeans” and “ra-ra skirts” add a hint of casualty/semi-formalness. As a result, the reader is able to relate to passage as well as extract information from it. The tone of the Passage B is very argumentative and aggressive, but still maintaining a sense of formality, e.g.: “are causing alarming changes” and “circulate text messages”. Because the tone is strongly persuasive, the writer enforces his opinions onto the reader. The first tone was relatable figurative language and everyday words to get the reader to relate to the passage to agree with it, it has lighter approach.

The evident theme of the both passages is “Social Media”, and it is that theme that one must keep in my mind while analyzing or comparing the two texts. This theme is constantly depicted in passage B with the phrases such as “Social Networking is causing alarming changes” and “Social networking could leave an entire generation”. Whereas in passage A, we get to know the themes through jargons suck as “facebook” and “twitter”. Both the passages try to keep the theme as explicit as possible to bring about awareness of the issue being discussed.

The attitude of the passage A is very matter of fact and straight to the point. The writer wastes no time in letting us know what the issue is. He fills in with the a little bit of rhetoric before dishing out the facts, but other than that uses phrases like “are regularly checking up” and “older people seems to be embracing “ to get his point across. The attitude of passage B is strongly biased. The writer tilts all his arguments to hid favor, tossing neutrality aside. The attitudes affect the reader in different way.Passage A lightly persuades the reader to “consider” using social media less, while in passage B, the writer forces his views upon the reader, so the reader feels like his responsibility to agree to the writer.

The expert opinion given in the first passage is that of James Thickett, “clearly, take up among the 16-year olds … is getting older”. Similarly in passage B, the writer provides the opinion of Sue Palmer,” we are seeing children’s brains … for millennia”. Both the writers use expert opinions to back up their arguments. Psychologically, humans are more likely to agree to something if it is coming from an expert or well-known person.

The language used in passage A, as Goldilocks would say, is “just right”. The language used is neither too complex (excluding a few jargons) nor too simple, but a nice comfortable middle. The only time unique words are used is where there is exaggeration, and that of course is for a reason. The language used in passage B uses very strong words such as “alarming changes” and “instant gratification”. For passage A, the writer kept the language style fairly simple, embellishing only where necessary. In other words, the writer wants his message conveyed clearly and simply.  Passage B, on the other hand, uses strong words to essentialise the message, and ingrain the point in reader’s mind.

The usage of’  m statistics in both passages is very clear. In passage A, the writer says “from 55% at the start of last year to 50% this year” and “30% of British adults have a facebook profile”. In passage, the writer comments, “150 million use facebook “and “six million signed up for twitter “. Although passage B uses statistics in a more exaggerated way, the usage of statistics more or less the same in both passages. The usage of facts makes the passage more genuine and believable to the reader, and he feels like he can trust the information.

Both the texts use punctuation in certain ways to achieve. For example in passage A, the writer says, ”has dropped for the first time-“and “16 -year -olds is very high …”. Here, the writer uses hyphens and ellipses to emphasize the phrase, or as said in show business, “pause for effect”. The writer also uses commas more than full stops to create a continuum of thought, and a good flow of reading for the reader to enjoy. In passage B, punctuation does not really play a vital role in the writing, but the writer has “paused for effect” in some places” extremely profitable – “, “if there is a true increase-“. This use of punctuation makes the reader pause and think in some places, already forming his opinions.

We cannot exactly say that the language used in passage A is simple. Words like “proliferation”, “trawling” and “adolescent exodus” prevent us from doing so. This vocabulary should be described as unique, because it is a rather odd choice of wording and is only used in places where the writer has meant to exaggerate, e.g.: “trawling the pages of facebook”, “travestying the outer reaches of MySpace “. The vocabulary in passage B, however, can only be described as heavy. Coupled with jargons and such, words like “engage””, millennia”, “eminent” and “gratification” make it evident to the reader that a serious issue is being discussed. This usage of vocabulary helps to awaken the reader’s senses and allow him to be fully aware of the topic at hand.

The clear use of jargons is maintained throughout passages. For example, in passage A, “facebook”, “MySpace”, and in passage B,”Bebo” and “twitter”. Using in any kind of writing. Using jargons in any kind of writing gives the reader the sense that the writer is well informed on the subject he is writing about.

The writers of the both passages also provide evidence to their claims in both texts. For example, in passage A, the writer names people such as James Thickett and Peter Phillips, and in passage B, Sue Palmer and Sharon Greenfield. The writer provides evidence as backup and sort of safety net for his claims in other words; the evidence provided proves the writer’s authenticity.

Exaggeration is one of the most obvious tools that the writers thought would come in handy. In passage A, the writer extremely stresses out some points this way – “trawling the pages of facebook”, 0.”Travestying the outer reaches from MySpace”, “is causing an adolescent exodus”, and “proliferation of Parents”. In the second passage, exaggeration is done mainly through the usage of bold words like “instant gratification”, “rewiring the brain”, and “conversation may eventually give away”. This exaggeration helps the writer highlight and enhance an argument without having to make it too complex.

The most distinctive way that both passages are different is the type and the use of figurative language. In passage A, some jargons are used here and there, “facebook”, ”MySpace” along with one or two metaphors “their love of being online”, “explosion behind the usage of twitter”. A personification is used “kill a youth trend”, and “adopt as its own”. Besides that, the writers helps us visualize a few things through relatable examples, such as, “uncles wearing skinny jeans”, and “mothers investing in rah-rah skirts”. Other than this, no such figurative language is used. In passage B, however, different types of figurative language are used. An old idiom is used, “strive a chord” as well as “buzzing” which is an onomatopoeia, and “flight or fight”, which is alliteration/assonance. In the first passage, figurative language is used to make the flow of reading easier and interesting for the reader, but in passage B, figurative language is used only to emphasize a particular phrase, e.g. :”most games only trigger flight or fight” “part of the brain”.

Both of the writer’s aim was to persuade the reader that using the Social Media can be harmful. The writers have used relatable examples and figurative language to amplify the arguments, and uses factual elements such as evidence, statistics, and expert opinions to remove any doubts from the reader’s mind. Both of the passages manage to persuade the reader, if not varying in tone, style and vocabulary. When analyzing both the passages, one must appreciate the diversity with which one can present two topics.

“Spellbound by the Mountains” by Mohib Khan 9E

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Summer vacations brought relief to me after a hectic year; the northern mountains had never looked more enticing. Reaching the mountains appeared to be a great difficulty, but it was worth every second of the journey. The mountains expressed their tyranny from the moment I entered the valley and into their domain. Threatening to drown my car in rocks any second, one had to be careful with every muscle moved. The sheer size of the hills and mountains astounded me. Vegetation overgrowth on the mountains decorated the hills and extended downwards into the supporting river flowing viciously downhill. The river ran into the sides like a truck ramming into a wall. Pine and baby aspen trees were dotted all along the landscape.

The conditions of the road on the way to my lovely cabin were terrible; the ruckus from the bottom of my car became almost unbearable. The rocks and deep potholes on the road shook the car and me in it, like a paint mixer. Every window in the car was rolled down, so I could have some leverage to hold on and not lose the grip I needed so greatly. The fresh mountain air brought some relief and filled my lungs with energy. The surrounding air was as pure as the fresh water making its way down a nearby waterfall, perhaps due to the melting of the glaciers. The last part of the journey became a bit of a stretch; gravity was not a friend of my car when it had to make its way up a steep hill. But alas, the travel was over and I had reached my destination.

A mountain top cabin had to be one of the best purchases of my lifetime. Even though nearby mountains were brooding and loomed over us, I still felt like I was at the top of the world. Evening that day would be special, as char grilled lamb would be my dinner of choice for the night. After a day of travel, all I really wanted to do was sit in my trusty chair and take in the jaw-dropping view. One could tell time had taken its toll on the mountain, because it had suffered things going beyond recorded human history. Earthquakes, early human struggle, human wars, extinct animals, weary travelers, and unknown plants: It had seen it all in its million plus years of lifetime. One could say that such experiences had given it such distinct features and irreversible marks. In my lost mesmerized mindset, I did not even notice the ring of snow covering the sky-punching mountain. Winter was here, and it had brought snow with it. Suddenly, I heard a deep, booming noise erupting in the distance and a huge wall of snow crashing down. Near the foothills, it had become a chute of white. Mist formed near these areas and grabbed at the ankle of the mountain. This had made the cold weather more evident. All across my line of sight, I saw the tips of mountain ranges sticking up like a row of thorns and swaddled around them were necklaces of powdery snow. The air became arctic cold by the minute. I was once again distracted during my gazing session, but at least it was a rewarding one. The unmistakable whiff of char grilled lamb wafted to my nose and attracted me towards the grill. The taste warmed my heart and filled my mouth with succulent delight. Dinner that night was cosmic.

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Q. Write a story, true or imaginary, entitled, ‘The final breath’ by Zara Irfan 10E

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Coming from a family where sophistication is the basic element of life can sometimes become exuberantly toxic. Riches and silk is all she had been taught about ever since she was a child, and she couldn’t help but ponder over how her life might have been if she wasn’t born in her family.

“Sophia don’t eat that”, “Sophia that’s unladylike”, “Sophia hands on your lap”, these voices echoed in her mind whenever she was about to do anything, till the point she couldn’t muster up the courage to simply breathe. Anxiety, anxiety, anxiety. It followed everywhere she stepped.
Panic attacks came and went occasionally, and her tears? They would cascade down her face every night like an isolated waterfall hidden between the mightiest of trees. Her screams of agony got muffled within the satin covers of her pillows, but she was utterly, utterly  helpless like a caged bird.
“Knock, knock”, came the sound of the massive doors of her bedroom. “Come in please,” her voice, as delicate as a rose, resounded in the silent room. That was all she said as she hurriedly fixed posture and rubbed the non-existent dust off her emerald gown.
The mahogany doorknobs turned and in came her deviously beautiful mother with all of her marvel and grace. Her dress glittered under the beaming sun rays coming through the windows perched upon her (rather elegant) dresser, and the sight made her uncomfortable- intimidated even.
“I have something to discuss with you Sophia,” her mother stated in her very high-pitched (but authoritative) voice. “Do you remember Charlie? Your father’s friend’s son. Oh! What a lovely young man”, she said, trying to imply something.
“Yes mother, the one that brought you that marvelous vase for your flowers?” Her mother slightly nodded. “Yes, he was very… nice.”
“Well that’s music to my ears! Your father and i have decided to have you two courted to each other. What a lovely young couple you two would make?”
And that was her breaking point. “She couldn’t do this to me. She couldn’t take the last bit of sanity left within me. She couldn’t give me off to a complete stranger. I didn’t love him. Hell! I didn’t even know him,” was what her thoughts conflicted about in her mind, and finally, after twenty three years of her life, she finally gathered up the courage to say this single word.
“No.”
Her breathing became ragged and she couldn’t process what was happening anymore.
“No? Young lady, you are exceeding your limits. Is that how you talk to your mother? I have taught you better than to talk back to me,” her mother said, almost screaming, in a gravely tone.
“You cannot do this to me mother! I am not a toy, not a play thing with whom you can do anything with! I am an adult, i have my own life-“
“Slap!” her sorry excuse of a mother back-handed her across her cheeks, but she couldn’t feel the pain, the sting. Not anymore. “I will lock you up in this room if i have to,” her mother dropped the final bomb and stormed out of the room, banging the impossibly perfect doors in the way.
Sophia knew she couldn’t do anything to prevent what was about to happen. Her fate had already been carved on a stone and there was nothing she could do to change it. So the last alternative she could think of was grave.
Death.
That was all she could think about as darkness loomed around every crevice of her body. The sadness in her life had tainted every chance of happiness she had. Her family had destroyed her entirely that even the thought of passing away didn’t scare her. And so, with her mind made, she strolled towards her bathroom with calculated steps, entirely emotionless and not a single tear flooding her cheeks, not a single thought that second guessed her decision.
She picked up the blade, which felt as light as a feather in her frail hands, and brought it up to her wrist, finally towards the path of freedom.
“Drip, drip, drip,” she heard the blood splatter on the polished and tiled floor.
Her subconscious wandered off to different times of her life. In the first period, she saw herself as a child trying to sneak a bar of chocolate into her room, only to be caught and scolded at by the housekeeper. Then, it strolled of to her fourteenth birthday when all she wanted was to eat another slice of cake. She remembered how delicious and utterly scrumptious it looked and how she wanted to devour it.
And finally, with a smile plastered on her face, she breathed her final breath.

Q. Write a story, true or imaginary, entitled, ‘We can still be friends’ by Ayzer Adeel 11B

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Tony stood paralyzed. The video had stopped, and Steve could hear his own heartbeat in his ears. He was calm for a long time, almost impressively calm, and Steve counted every cautious heartbeat before he would have to raise his fists. It was always this way with Tony.

Bucky stood behind Steve, feeling himself radiate guilt so strongly. Confused guilt. But guilt. He had done it. He had been brainwashed, manipulated, tortured and so much more, but he had done it. Bucky closed his eyes, Maria’s pleads echoing behind his ears, clawing at his chest. He felt his muscles clench, and he realized he was so used to the tension knot in his body, he couldn’t remember what it felt like to be calm. He went through it again, when he ripped open the door of their car, when he threw Robert out like a fragile puppy, and he remembered the weight of the trigger, light as a feather, brushing around him screams and ash like a rush of warm air.

The video closed, but Tony could still see it in the darkness of the cave. He saw Bucky, ruthless. He saw his mother- the woman whose arms he never went into-fall, before gasping shockingly. Tony felt the snow cause his cheeks to burn. The Winter Soldier killed his mom. He felt the iron round his fingers clench into a fist. He felt as if a dam of rage, rage that had been gathering since he heard his mom was murdered, explode in his heart. “Who would’ve done it?” Now he knew who. And the insurmountable anger, like fire, flooded and whipped through his veins. He owed the Winter Soldier nothing.

Tony felt power build up in his chest, holding something else back, as he moved towards the murderer. But he felt a hand block him….

He looked at Steve. His helmet covered half his face, but he could see him just fine.

“Did you know?”

Steve saw Tony’s eyes shining. His mouth was set, as if he already knew the answer. He felt pressure build up in his chest, only before replying.

“Yes.”

Tony’s helmet clipped shut, and his arm swang at Steve’s face. Steve ignored the cold but burning iron on his face, but felt himself spin and fall to the ground.

Tony launched himself to Bucky, and Bucky realized it had started. Bucky fought. Tony started this, and he would make sure he won. He hit Tony’s head, and then his iron arms, and then his ribs. He punched and kicked and punched and kicked….

Tony felt cold inside his suit. He was protected, but to what extent? He had been fighting for a while. He felt them hit him with all their might, denting the iron, breaking his thrusters. Every time he got close to the assassin, Steve would save him. The three of them ended on the floor, where Tony was being hit by the two of them. They fought like heroes. They were not heroes.

Steve felt the cuts and wounds on his face. He felt his shield fly from his hands to Bucky’s, to Tony’s face. but then he saw bright gold light, and felt himself fall on the hard, cold ground. He felt numb, his body aching.

Bucky saw Steve on the ground, groaning, and was overcome by impulsion. He pushed Iron man to the wall, and squeezed the helmet with his bare fingers, and his heart with his metal arm. He felt his fingers crawl and push, iron cutting them, and he felt his shoulder push, and push and push, till he screamed in pain.

His vision went pale, and when his eyes adjusted, he noticed his arm was gone. Bucky felt nausea build inside of him. He moved it. he didn’t feel pain, but he felt hollow. He wasn’t awake for the time he lost his real arm, but he was awake now, and this arm was the reality of what he had now become…which made him realize something. Slowly, he loosened his grip. He wasn’t fighting because he wanted to, but because he was trained to. HYDRA had trained him to not have a choice. He was a weapon, and did a gun have the choice to kill?

Steve saw Tony throw away his friend on the ground, and then he ran to defend him. He fought Ironman. Threw his shield at his face, used all of his energy and applied all the skills he knew. He pushed forward his shield at his hands, and realized he was using his hand blasters. He pushed, buried his feet in the ground, turned his arms to stone. He couldn’t let Tony get to Bucky. They fought and fought, until Tony fell down, and Steve knocked off his helmet with his shield, and buried it deep into his mechanical heart.

Tony couldn’t move. He felt the veins and bones inside his flesh ache. He felt them push down with as much force as he pushed them upwards with. He was paralyzed. He tried to roll himself towards the side, ready to throw up. He let himself feel the pain, worst of which went towards his heard. It clenched and throbbed and knotted and grated itself against itself.

Steve felt his soul locked as he bend down to pick Bucky up, his face splashed with blood. It was over.

“That shield doesn’t belong to you. You don’t deserve it. My father made that shield.” Tony spat.

Steve felt his heart heavy, and felt his soul clang against the cold stone.

He threw down his shield.

 

 

The Blizzard by Zara Irfan 10E

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Higher and higher she ascended up the steeping slopes of the mountain. All she could see was white, white and white. Her eyelids failed to open entirely and looked like cracks on a window, little room, but just enough to glance at the outside world.

The cold seeped through her thick, wool clothes and touched her skin with ferocity, and her shivering was relentless. The chattering of her pearly white teeth was mute amongst the heavy whooshing sounds of the blizzard running a marathon against her direction which made taking a singe step seem immensely hard. Her frail legs were buried two feet under the heavy snow carpeting the entire expanse, its color reflecting her pale, snow white skin.
Cheeks flushed and red, and her icy blue eyes trained ahead, she wanted to give up and settle under the mass of the snow. The monstrosity of the wind felt like spikes pricking her skin and how she wished she fell into a sleep like death like Aurora had. She never could have thought she would ever envy a princess in a matter like this, but you never know what life throws at you, now do you?
Not having it in her to take another step, her petite frame met the heavy frosting swirled on the ground by God himself, but the taste of it was anything but sweet. It was venomous and deadly, ready to gulp her.
The snow- now covering almost all of her body- compressed her and squeezed the living day lights out of her. She sat there engulfed within the stacks of the velvet but hard snow, and her body was moving back and forth on its own accord. Her eyelashes were coated with snowflakes that were mesmerizingly beautiful that they put crystals to shame. But, however they might looked, she loathed the feeling of anything ice-cold to even brush past her.  She disregarded their beauty and continued to rub her gloved, bony hands together but it was as useless as talking to a wall.
She took a moment and swiftly enveloped the surroundings into her eyes with keen observation. She noticed the humongous conifers and pine trees that looked dead and lifeless underneath the blizzard. Tentacles of ice hung low on the branches and she was amazed at the fierceness of them. They were solid as a rock and despite the blizzard blazing past them in the most atrocious way possible, they were able to withstand their positions and held their stance. They were an army trained for battle.
Her focused eyes then wandered over to the dense forest ahead of her. The trees were like giants, cascading shadows darker than black on the white rug below. Their mightiness and posture intimidated her more than the blizzard showering its curses upon her. Their trunks were gigantic and in a deep shade of brown; but the ice and snow covering it dimmed the essence of its colors. The long, spine-like leaves loomed over the massive bulks of wood and made the image of the trees look impossibly bigger.
And just like that, completely exhausted, her emotionless eyes fluttered shut and she fell in the middle of the blizzard, unable to keep up with the cruelness of the storm anymore.

Descriptive Essay: ‘’The Final Breath’’ By Esha Shahzad 10-M

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He dragged her limp, unconscious body across the filthy, blood-coated floor. Her small frame made it a lot easier for him to carry her to her demise. The rotten scent of death engulfed the entire corridor like pieces of white cloud covering the bright, blue sky. However, unlike the purity that clouds symbolize, the scent was what completely destroys the innocence of this world.

Sarah could never, in her wildest dreams, imagine the unnerving fate that awaited her. On her way from school, she was like any average teenager- mindlessly scrolling through her phone and munching on a pack of Mnm’s. Her eyes were completely trailed off from the outside world and glued to the bright screen of her mobile phone. She was as clueless as ever.

A white SUV halted to a stop in front of her, blocking her path. Finally, she looked up and her eyes met the most emotionless and dead pair of eyes she had ever seen. The man swiftly opened the door of his van and proceeded towards her. A feeling of dread washed upon her as she took baby steps and slowly edged towards the giant tree beside her.

What was he doing? She thought to herself. Drops of water filled her concerned eyes and she as on the verge of tears. With one swift motion, the strange grabbed her by her arm and began to drag her to the SUV. Sarah resisted.

She forcefully kicked her legs out and open, her long, golden locks were all over her sweaty, adrenaline rushed body. She started punching everywhere like a fierce boxer but it was to no avail. The man was just too strong.

He hit her hard on her head with his large, thick hand and she fell face first to the ground, directly in front of the door of the SUV. She laid there, half-unconscious, before being roughly picked up and angrily tossed inside. She was aware of what was happening but her movements were restricted as her entire body fell numb. Her body grew heavier than a log by each passing second. Dreadful thoughts raced her mind.

What was happening? Why is he doing this? What have I ever done to him?

In mere seconds, the SUV stopped in front of an old, dark and gloomy mansion segregated from the world in the middle of nowhere. It looked abandoned. The man hastily opened the door and dragged Sarah by her arm and into the mansion. The entrance was covered in broken cobwebs and black spiders. Sarah took one look at the outside world.

‘’Daylight looks so magnificent’’, she thought to herself. The man closed the door behind them and she caught sight of a little, red ladybird. She envied its freedom. She wanted to see hope that it symbolized, but all she saw now was the emerging end as she took one last breath and headed into oblivion.

Q3. AO3: Comparison Question By: Esha Shahzad 10-M

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Extract A-‘it’s so over: cool cyber kids abandon social networking sites’ and extract B-‘Social Websites Harm Children’s Brains’ are both non-fiction newspaper articles that talk about social media and use techniques to back up their arguments.

The main idea of talking about social media in both passages is similar, however the content and purpose of both passages is quite different. Extract A mainly informs the reader about how there is a decline in the use of social media amidst youngsters and how it is getting more and more popular among adults who know exactly how to ‘’kill a youth trend’’. On the other hand, Extract B informs the reader about harms and dangers of social media mainly in children and how their ‘’social lives depend on iy’’. These habits can harness serious mental illnesses and can infantilize the brain. Children should instead learn to ‘’make real relations with people’’.

Both passages are written for the purpose to inform the reader. Thos is evident by use of facts and expert advice in the passage. However, extract A is intended for a more general audience compared to extract B which appeals mostly to parents concerned about their childrens’ excessive use of social media.

As mentioned earlier, both authors make use of rhetorical techniques in the passage. Firstly, both authors use facts and statistics in the passage. In extract A, there is a much broader use of statistics as a form of backing up the argument. This is evident when the author compares the use of social media in children (declined from ‘’55% to 50 %’’) to that of adults (40% to 46%). In extract B, the author mentions how ‘’Over 150 million people use Facebook’’ and how they should instead opt for socializing without using their mobile phones and social media.

Secondly, expert advice is used in both passages to add weight to their argument and reinforce a point. It helps manipulate the reader into believing that the authors are aware of what they are talking about. In extract A, advice from Peter Phillips (regulator’s head of strategy) and James Thicket (director of market research) is taken who further prove that how popularity of social media is increasing in adults, while the opposite is happening in children. In extract B, expert advice from Baroness Greenfield (Oxford University neuroscientist) and Jane Healy (Educational psychologist) who are both medical experts and stress on how extended periods of time on social media will cause a ‘’sharp decline’’ in their abilities.

The language of both passages is semi-formal. Extract A uses heavy and unique vocabulary such as ‘’proliferation’’ and an allusion to ‘’exodus’’ is also made. Jargons such as ‘’cyber world’’ are also used. These techniques are a form of LOGOS which create a sense of authenticity and reliability in the reader’s mind. On the other hand, extract B uses simple vocabulary with multiple jargons such as ‘’fight or flight’’ and ‘’micro blogging’’ which add coherency in the passage and an impression is given off to the audience that the author is fully aware of the subject.

Both passages make use of figures of speech. However, in extract A only uses metaphor – ‘’kill a youth trend’’ and exaggeration – ‘’behind the explosion’’ which both engage the reader and make a dramatic point. In extract B, there is a broader variety of figures of speech. Idiom such as ‘’strike a chord’’ are used instead of vague, simple phrases to engage the reader and draw their attention to how alarming a recent study could be for parents. Examples of onomatopoeia such as ‘’buzzing’’ and imagery such as ‘’killing’’ and ‘’skinning’’ can also be found which helps the reader visualize and evokes a sense of empathy in the reader for the poor, tormented animals.

Furthermore, extract B uses triples such as ‘’killing, skinning and butchering’’ which paints a picture of absolute torture in the reader’s mind and a simple process of making food is turned dramatic and empathy-seeking. In extract A, there is an absence of trong adjectives and the focus is more on using professional help and statistics to prove a point.

The syntax of both passages is similar. They both use short paragraphs and short sentences to make it easier to read and make the layout more visually and aesthetically appealing to the reader. It also helps the passage from sounding dull and monotonous. Extract B also makes use of dashes which help separate a thought and allow the reader to pause and think about the material provided in the passage.

In conclusion, both passages successfully talk about social media however, there purpose is achieved differently. Extract A focuses on adults and tries to stop them from ‘’killing a youth trend’’ and Extract B focuses on ‘’alarming changes’’ to children’s’ minds by excessive and constant use of social media.