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‘AO2: Telling Rowdy’ by Zahra Khan

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This passage has been elicited from a fictional novel, “The Absolutely True Diary of a Part Time Indian” by Sherman Alexie. The text is conformed as a narrative short story, with two main objectives. The first is to entertain the reader. The second, more important aim is to draw attention to the miserable life that many Native Americans lead on reservations.

The story revolves around two Indian boys, Rowdy and Junior, who reside on a reservation in D.C. Junior believes that life on the reservation is balking his road to a better future, and has made an imperturbable decision to attend Rearden, a school for white children. However, he must tell his best friend Rowdy, that he is leaving.

This passage is intended for audiences of all ages. With regard to this, the diction is simple so that it can be comprehended by readers of all ages. The text is mainly composed of dialogue, and narrations from Junior are present.

The tone of this passage is very informal, with contractions being a large part of it. The theme of the extract is friendship. It realistically depicts what happens when two friends make a resolute decision to go their separate ways. It also shows how a broken friendship can mar a person.

Figures of speech are common in this passage and are used for a common purpose: to stress upon a particular aspect of the text or dialogue. The following F.O.S. are significant in the passage.

Firstly, similes are used .this is to highlight a specific aspect of the text or to emphasize the character’s feelings for instance, Junior says “ I’m as serious as a tumour” it implies that Junior has made a final decision and is removing rowdy’s doubts about the topic.

In addition, hyperbole is also present. When Junior says “I’m going to die if I don’t”. His manifest desperation causes the audience to sympathize with him, along with noticing the poverty and misery of the reservation.

Lastly, a metaphor is used: “Rowdy stopped screaming with his mouth but kept screaming with his eyes. This project to the readers Rowdy’s state of utter devastation and anger.

A number of literary techniques are also utilized to influence the reader’s thoughts and highlight important ideas.

The first significant technique is repetition. Positive vocabulary is used to describe white children and words like beautiful and smart are used emphasize how much Junior idolizes them.

Another consequent technique is comparison. The white children are compared to the Indians, by using an example from a famous novel ‘A tale of two cities’. The white children are referred to as the best of times. The Indians, in contrast, are referred to as the worst of times. This highlights the obvious envy Junior feels towards the white children.

The feelings of both characters are depicted using very strong expressions. Junior feels desperate to leave the reservation. He thinks that at Rearden, he can live up to his full potential, free of the restrictions of poverty. On the other hand, he feels sad and guilty about leaving his lifelong best friend Rowdy. Thus, his feelings collate, and he is forced to choose between his friend and his education.

Rowdy feels ravaged at the thought of his friend leaving him, and does everything he can to sway him. He feels indignant that his best friend is abandoning him, and his anger turns into resentment, causing him to hurt Junior.

In conclusion, I believe that the writer has, through skillful use of adjectives, F.O.S., and a variety of literary techniques, managed to weave anger, grief and guilt into a convincing tapestry of a broken friendship, while at the same time using direct language, making it suitable for young audiences.

‘A Crowded Place’ by Alysha Kazmi

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I hate weddings. I hate the noise and I hate a crowded place such as a wedding hall.

“Welcome! Welcome!”, the voices greeted us as we stepped on the long, white marbled staircase which led to the wedding hall. The giggling and gossiping of girls about their floor touching gowns were aching my ears. Their heavily embroidered gowns with uncountable layers of cloth beneath were kind of irritating me. The humongous beads on their dresses were shining bright like diamonds. When they moved, it reflected straight into my eyes. The noise of the banging drums were echoing in my ears. “Bang! Bang! Bang!”. I could see the sticks in the drummer’s hand hit and bounce off the drum in a specific sequence.

The midget-like girls stood in a long line that looked like a train to me. They showered handfuls of fresh, red roses on us as if we had we had won a battle. I stood there still for a second and watched the petals slide on my magenta, silk dress. It felt refreshing. I could imagine a huge garden laid with several bed of roses ready to sacrifice their beauty for us. I could just hear the roses plead as the stiff, giant hands of the gardener plucked them. How cruel?

That moment of realisation was suddenly interrupted by a tall, bulky woman who threw her arms around me and squeezed me. I could feel my face in between her breasts. The size of her arm was equal to my whole existence. That one hug was followed by several others. They were stuffy, sweaty, stinky and suffocating.

Followed by the stampede of aunties was an enormous, freshly scented wedding hall which managed to lighten my mood. The stage was flooded with bright, yellow sunflowers sprinkled with water. In between there were orchids which prevented the body odour and maintained the freshness around the stage. The base of the stage was decorated with silk draping all around with shinning pearls fixed in between to add to the beauty of it. The hard work of the decorators could be seen and felt when you touch them.

While I busy appreciating the beauty of the stage, the families hurried to book themselves a suitable place next to where the food was served. I also sat with my family in a corner and just took a moment to absorb what was happening around me.

A round table with soft, cushioned chairs which had all the elderly, old women of the family on it was placed right in the centre. Their wrinkled faces, broken teeth and shaking hands made them the most unique. The boredom was right there on their faces! I could feel them. Some laughed with difficultly while some even slept with their sinful mouths dropping. Those ladies were totally unaware of the world.

At another corner of the hall was a long sleek mirror also decorated with orchids. And what would you expect in front of the only mirror in the hall? Girls! Laughing and taking selfies with weird expressions on their faces. They thought of themselves as some Disney princesses while the mirror stood there laughing at them and actually showing them the reality. Poor them, indeed.

As I revolved my eyes around, I saw a young being pulling his mother’s shirt and begging her to feed him while she was busy chatting on her phone. His screams pierced my ears. Tears were falling down his chubby cheeks like little raindrops.

Everywhere my keen eyes went, all I saw was a herd of people at every corner of the hall. I wonder how people can gather so often and able to tolerate each other? Aren’t they tired of it?

‘My Favourite Food’ by Zoraiz Syed

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The smell of freshly baked tortilla bread walks from the doors of the kitchen into the nostrils of the foodie as he waits to devour a scrumptious meal of Quesadillas. He waits to see a big pile of boneless, golden-brown chicken, topped onto a bed of fresh, green, leafy lettuce. He waits to see the chicken drizzled in a creamy, sour-cream sauce which would make his taste buds pop with zingy flavor. Most of all, he waits for the dark white slice of cheddar cheese, heated at exactly ten degrees to provide a warm blanket of melted goodness over the saucy chicken and lettuce. His mouth begins to drool as he sees the waiter, an angel from God, bringing his lovely plate of happiness, all wrapped up in the crisp, golden tortilla bread that he first smelt when he entered the restaurant,

The angel settles the plate of Quesadillas right in front of the foodie, whose greedy eyes had been stalking the food since the beginning of the parade. He proceeds to pick up a fork and knife, but decides to enjoy the authenticity of the food. He rolls up the sleeves of his checkered cotton shirt, grabs the body of the Quesadilla and engulfs it, slowly. His eyes close after that mesmerizing first bite, as he savors every bit of the creamy meal and then reaches out for another and another and another….

The puffy texture of the bread rubs against the insides of his cheek as its warmth converts his mouth into a heater. Following the light, airy bread, came the heavy, filling chicken covered in sour-cream and cheese. The tanginess of the sour-cream was balanced out by the saltiness of the cheese as the couple enveloped the rich, juicy cut of meat, providing the foodie with a blissful feeling. His teeth munched away at the chicken, every bite leading to more. The freshly cut lettuce provided a feeling of healthy eating to the heavy, rich meal.

To conclude this Mexican extravaganza, the foodie gulped a large amount of mint margarita. The freshness of the mint awoke his senses and the coolness of the ice restored the coolness of his mouth. Together, these two cleared his palate and he became hungry for more.

‘AO2: Telling Rowdy’ by Zarah Kazmi

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This extract has been taken from “The Absolutely True Diary of a Part-time Indian” by Sherman Alexie. It is a short fiction story containing dialogues between two friends, who are soon to become two enemies. The main theme of the extract is “friendship”, with other sub-themes such as hope, betrayal, and love. The two most imperative purposes of the passage were firstly to entertain the audience which consists of young children and those interested in fiction, and secondly to draw attention to the hard life of the native American-Indians. Due to his hard life, Junior has no choice but to leave and go to Reardons which is considered as betrayal by his long-time best friend, Rowdy.

The tone of the passage is informal, somewhat casual and also sad. By the usage of words like ‘stupid’ and ‘wuss’, the content becomes highly informal, which shows how open the two friends were with each other. Elements of sadness and distress are shown by the usage of phrases/words like, ‘pain, pure pain’, ‘scared’, ‘crying’, etc. such language makes the audience feel for Junior who was devastated on being separated from his best friend who in return was shocked as well. This kind of language also leads us to the negativity being portrayed in the passage.

The story is conveyed in 1st person point of view which is Junior’s point of view as ‘I’ is used right in the start of the passage. This shows that author wanted the audience to know Junior’s feelings of separation and hardship. A smooth conversation is carried out throughout the passage containing harsh words which describes the emotions of the characters. Italics are used in places such as, ‘magnificent’, ‘everything’, ‘only’, etc., to show what Junior was going through. With the usage of italics, Junior describes his feelings towards the students at Reardons by repeating the same phrase again and again, “they were beautiful, smart, epic, and filled with hope”. This shows his desperation and also leads us to one of the sub themes, ‘hope’, which Junior describes as a “mythical creature”. This is where we get to know the hardships of Native American Indians who were so desperate but could not rely on anything but hope.

Figures of speech including similes such as “as serious as tumor”, “nose bled like firework”, and metaphors like “heart broke into 14 pieces”, show rather than tell the audience about the intensity of Junior’s situation and his friendship with Rowdy (14 years). Onomatopoeia is also used (‘bang!’), which depicts the sound when Rowdy hit Junior. The sentence structure consists of simple sentences (“they knew everything”) and compound sentences (“I don’t know but I do know…”) which shows the variation in the style of writing. A visual of either Junior or Rowdy is also provided.

Punctuation contained ellipses, “I’m doing it … I’m going to Reardon”, which depicts the Junior’s assertive tone. It also develops emphasis and suspense. Effective exclamation marks also add emphasis to the situation (‘bang!’). A reference is also made to the book “A tale of two cities” in the 1st paragraph to compare the two different lives of Indians and students of Reardon. When Junior describes their qualities by saying “they are beautiful, smart, epic and filled with hope”, he is also showing his desperation. His desperation is once again shown when he says “I’m going to die if I don’t leave”.

The feelings of both the characters contradict one another. Junior is helpless and devastated while Rowdy is extremely angry and flustered. He is the kind of person who tries very hard to hide his feelings by ‘screaming’, ‘punching’ his brother like friend. Emotions of both of them are shortened in one phrase, “pain, pure pain”. The author has cleverly used all these elements to tell us the feelings, the emotions one goes through when they are being separated from their loved ones. Separation is that one element that made two best friends, two worst enemies.

‘AO2: Telling Rowdy’ by Rumel Rana

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The passage is very emotional. It tells me to what extend some people go for friendship.

The title tells me what the passage is about. For example: ‘Telling Rowdy’. The intended effect tells me that Rowdy is being told about something.

The author is ‘Sherman Alexie’ who is a short story writer. The intended effect relates to Native Americans.

The genre is fiction. For example: ‘I do know that hope for me is like a some mythical creature’. The intended effect makes me read this story from which I will come to know the life style of Indians and Rearden kids.

The theme is friendship. For example: ‘You can still come with me ‘and ‘You’re still my best friend’. The intended effect is pathos.

The content tells that they both are trying to remain friends. For example: ‘You can still come with me’. The intended effect reminds me the love of friendship.

The purpose is entertainment. For example: ‘My heart broke into fourteen pieces’. The intended effect makes the reader feel emotional and curious to read more.

The audience is young adults. For example: ‘Don’t touch me, you idiot!’. The intended effect stimulates emotion.

The style is narrative. For example: ‘You’ll never do it’, ‘You’re too scared’. The intended effect adds color to the story and makes it more intense.

The tone is sorrowful. For example: ‘It was pain, pure pain’. The intended effect induces strong emotion.

The attitude is critical. For example: ‘I have to go. I’m going to die if I don’t leave’. The intended effect is intense and makes reader emotional.

The punctuation is in a great amount. For example: ‘I’m doing it … I’m going to Rearden tomorrow’. The intended effect is to gain attention.

The sentence structure is mostly dialogues. For example: “Rowdy’, I said, ‘I’m as serious as a tumor’. The intended effect creates a clear image of what is happening in the plot.

The paragraphing is mostly short paragraphs. For example: Short paragraph is of one line and long paragraph is of four-six lines. The intended effect is easy to read and understand.

The F.O.S are in variation. For example: Hyperbole: ‘My heart broke into fourteen pieces’. The intended effect is that it creates picture.

The conclusion is pathos and makes me want to read the whole story.