I believe that text two is more successful in showing us what it is like to move to a different country. Text two’s style of writing is descriptive which lets the reader feel, hear, smell, see and touch all the character’s feelings and emotions as he moves to a different country; “white house with its perfectly mown lawns and flowers lining the entrance and a carpet in every room”, “a landscape so white, so pure, could only dazzle us, blind us, intoxicate us.” By reading such description, the reader for example, feels as if he himself is standing with the landscape right in front of him. The author uses description to create an image in the reader’s mind and to give him a closer look of the story.
I also chose text two because of the amount of figurative language used in it; “like a mother duck, she walked ahead of us”, “garment over another, layer by layer, like the homeless”, “The town of Granby sheltered us.” FOS makes sure that the description does not bore the reader and from time to time adds sparkle to the text. The author uses them to captivate the reader and give them something to relate to.
The reason I did not choose text one was because of the abundant usage of short sentences like, “The taxi pulled up outside the hotel.”, “Alen watched television.” These short sentences although might add emphasis, but over usage of them makes it look like the author is an eight year old! Short sentences lack proper description which, I believe, cannot give the reader a full show of what it is like to move to a different country.
Both Text One and Text Two do an excellent job of presenting information regarding the difficulties and hardships encountered while moving to a different country, but I personally felt that Text Two was more superior and successful in it’s portrayal of the topic. Text One and Text Two are both book extracts.Text One was written by Benjamin Zephaniah, while Text Two was written by Kim Thuy.
The purpose of both texts is to inform and they have a general audience.However, Text One is tailored to suit a wide range of audiences, while Text Two has a more sophisticated audience. Although the language used in Text One is simple,clear and easy to understand, I prefer Text Two. Text Two has a more mature perspective and uses vivid imagery to enhance it’s appeal. There are also well-chosen adjectives e.g.”A landscape so white, so pure”,”short-sleeved orange pullover” which allow the reader to create a clear image in their mind.
Text Two is more interesting and amusing and is able to effectively grasp the reader’s attention making it overall more enjoyable to read. Text One lacks this quality and hence it appears more dull and fails to maintain the reader’s interest.
Text One contains a majority of short sentences and short paragraphs. This makes the writing seem more simple and childish e.g.”but there were no people”,”Alem watched television” etc. Text Two allows the reader to relate to the author and feel more attached to the text. The long sentences and relatively longer paragraphs enhance logos significantly.
Text One comparatively contains much less figures of speech than Text Two. Text Two is therefore much more alluring e.g.”like a mother duck” Text Two is made much more beautiful and enchanting.
Text One although reader-friendly has a major flaw-it lacks vivid and crisp descriptions. It is simple and this simplicity does not appeal to me as much as Text Two. Text One and Text Two have an informal tone and both relate personal experiences. Text Two is more successful as it effectively presents the hardships in a more graceful manner.
Another reason why I prefer Text Two is because of its wonderful vocabulary that is very impactful and entrances the reader immediately. I also feel that Text Two contains more information and essential details. It is extremely well-written in my opinion. Text One lacks these redeeming qualities which make it very inferior in comparison.
Passage One and Passage Two both focus the life threatening situations faced by different people at different times. The explanation of various threatening situations is also given , which will help the reader to know and gain knowledge of all that can happen in a forest.
I like Passage Two better, entitled,”Angels in the wilderness” which was interviewed by “Amy Racina”. I like this passage as it is a story of personal experience, which details every single misery the person has gone through. For example, “dragging myself along with my hands.”line 8, the use of ethos is done, which emphasis the audience to feel sympathy for the person. It also uses description such as,” Onto solid hillside crumbled beneath me.”.The range of audience is very wide as she is basically teaching the audience not to give up for instance,” I survived for four days and nights, dragging myself along with my hands refusing to give up.”and ” Making a plan kept my mind focused on what I could do to help myself.”. Due to these statements many may get inspiration and would not give up. Her final statements impress many as she says, ” Just a few final thoughts. Love your life. Never give up. And always believe in miracles.” which encourage people to believe themselves and to achieve something in life.
Text One is ” The Soul Survivor” written by, “Sally Williams”. I did not choose Text One because firstly its not narrated by the victim itself as if it was narrated by the victim in Text Two, if it was narrated by the victim there would be more sympathetic appeals as well as description. The description of the misery is not given clearly, which may cause the narrator to loose a lot of sympathies. Secondly this text does not contain anything which would inspire or make the readers feel sympathetic, the ending is also very vague,”It was pure chance that they came that day.” whereas the feelings of the girl are not described,which may not urge the audience to read further articles and feel for her.
Therefore, I prefer Passage Two better than Passage One as it fills in every aspect of sympathy. Both poetry same objective ,yet Text Two is better.